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This is my discussion writing -


 * “Should New Zealand soldiers be in Afghanistan?” **


 * - Should or shouldn’t? **


 * NZ soldiers are helping people by building houses and schools and also peace keeping, they are helping out by training the Afghanistan soldiers. **


 * Firstly, New Zealand soldiers are doing a good thing helping out the Afghans, but some people don’t believe that they should be over their. They think that it is too risky that something bad could happen such as ambush, more deceased people and battle. I don’t see the problem with the soldiers over in Afghanistan but other people do. **


 * Secondly, the New Zealand soldiers are helping them by training their soldiers, and helping them build schools and houses so that Afghanistan is a better place to live in. But at anytime something could go wrong and thats what people are afraid of. Most families are afraid of losing family members and scared that something terrible could strike. **


 * Furthermore, New Zealand soldiers are trying to make Afghanistan a better place and have more peace. Afghans are struggling every year because of the battles that go on, if the soldiers carry on helping it would be a better place to live in and their will be more peace keeping. **


 * Lastly, Something bad could happen to the soldiers and everything could go wrong their are many different dangers that they need to be aware of. The Taliban’s could strike at any time killing our New Zealand soldiers. By New Zealand soldiers being over their and training the soldiers more battles could come by and more of the Taliban’s will strike. **


 * Summing it up - I believe that what the New Zealand soldiers are doing is a great thing and it would help out alot. I think that they should be in Afghanistan helping because it’s a good thing for everyone. Their will be more peace keeping and less ambush and battles. Their won’t be as many deceased people and it will be a better country. **

We have been looking at writing a discussion this is Sammie and I's story.


 * 20.8.12 **
 * WALT: **


 * Mcdonalds VS Subway **
 * Mcdonalds has a lot of fatty food that many kids get addicted to and want more. Where is subway has healthy wraps and sandwiches. **


 * Firstly, Subway has A variety of yummy and delicious salads, Breads and wraps. Subway also makes their own homemade bread as McDonalds don’t. As they make your wraps, sandwiches you are able to watch them make it so you are satisfied about your meal. You can choose what you want in your sandwich and there are many choices. Subway is a healthy fast food place many people enjoy to eat at. **


 * Secondly, Most of subways food is 98 % fat free which is good for people on diets. Subway is a lot more healthier than other fast food places such as BK (Burger King), KFC (Kentucky fried chicken). Over the years the fat race has been slowly getting bigger and bigger and more people go to Burger King and other fast food places. **


 * Furthermore, everybody loves Mcdonalds, because of the excellent parties they provide for little kids. Kids love to come and visit Mcdonalds because of the awesome equipment they provide for the kids to play on. Ronald mcdonald keeps kids satisfied and encourages them to eat at Mcdonalds. They also give out toys which promotes them to a higher level. **


 * Lastly, Mcdonalds also is very attention grabbing as they have the weight watchers meals. There is also a cafe that many people go to enjoy a quiet coffee. Mcdonalds also stays open for 24 hours, there is also a fast drive through that people can just pop in and grab a quick meal. **


 * Despite Mcdonalds fatty foods, it is a great place to eat at and enjoy a kids party. There are more things to choose from and more things that persuade kids to eat at Mcdonalds such as Ronald Mcdonald, the play area and the quiet cafe. Mcdonalds is also a good place to come for quick and easy tea, Its a good place to meet friends and watch your children play. Nothings better than seeing your kids happy. **

=At the moment room 14 have been looking at fairy tales. In this activity we had to retell a fairy tale from somebody eles perspective. This is mine.=


 * Little Red Riding Hood - Grandma’s Perspective **


 * Grandma is laying in bed sick and she thinks to herself "Where is Little Red?" **
 * suddenly, there's a loud bang on the door and in runs the BBWolf. He rips the blankets off her and locks her in the wardrobe. **
 * The BBWolf puts on Grandma's nighty, slippers and bonnet and climbs into the bed, eagerly waiting for Little Red to come and visit. **
 * "Knock, knock" went the door and then Little Red wandered in and said "Grandma, I'm here to make you feel better." **
 * " Come in sweetheart, I've been waiting for you!"said the wolf in a high pitched voice. Little Red walked up the creaking stairs and gives grandma a hug... “Grandma you must be very sick because your eyes are huge” said Little red. “Yes dear I have a very bad cold” Says BBwolf. Grandma what big nose you have Yes it will help me smell the yummy cupcakes you have baked for me. Grandma did you get your false teeth enlarged and much much sharper. Yes I did all the better to eat you with. Grandman what do you mean ? Eat me... your the BBwolf “AHHH” screams Little red. The BBwolf jumps out of the bouncy spring bed and rips off Grandma’s clothes. **


 * Little Red runs out of the room down the creaky stairs and out the cottage door, there stands her Father the woodcutter. The BBwolf runs out hungry and waiting, but when he gets outside he is in for a big surprise the woodcutter was waiting. The BBwolf runs into the forest and that was the last time Little Red and her Father saw him. **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Little Red runs into the cottage looking for her Grandmother, She runs up the stairs tripping over her long red coat. She searches her Grandmother’s room and then she hears a loud BANG. A noise comes from the wardrobe she opens it and out comes her sickly Grandmother. Grandma hops back into her comfy bed. **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“I made you some cupcakes Grandma” says Little Red. “Thank you sweetie I know now to keep my door locked” Says the Grandma with her croaky voice. Little Red and her Father go home, they let the Mother know that everything is fine and they live happily ever after with no more Big Bad Wolf. **

My exposition:


 * <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">2.5.12 **
 * <span style="background-color: #ff0000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">WALT: <span style="font-family: 'Comic Sans MS'; font-size: 16px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> Continue with opening paragraph. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">“Students Should be paid for having good grades!” **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">3 points: **
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Students need to get something in return for good grades **
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">they will work harder **
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">kids will enjoy going to school more **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Opening paragraph: **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">If teachers paid students for getting good grades say every time they got were they are supposed to be they get $10 and when they get over were they are supposed to be they should get $20. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Firstly, **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I think that kids should get paid for good grades not only because they get money but also because they would enjoy coming to school more, and also they need to get some reward in return for good grades. Kids will come to school happy and work much harder then usual. But then again they will just get good grades and get paid but they could be being naughty at school or at home, so I think that they should have to get good grades and be good at home and at school. Their teachers should have a meeting with their parents and see how they have been at home and they are not aloud to get in the behaviour book. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Secondly, **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Kids might take advantage of teachers and only work hard for the money, but if the teachers made it that when they got the money they were not allowed to spend it on lollies it has to do with school stationery. Kids might think that it’s dumb only being able to buy school stationary so they should get a little more money to spend on themselves only if they are not in the behaviour book and they have been good at home and at school. It’s alot of money to pay for the whole school so I think that only year 7 and 8 should get paid and under year 7 and 8 get a lollie. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">lastly, **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">I don’t think students should get money every time they get good grades only once every 2 weeks. Teachers get paid for looking after students so I think that students should get paid for good grades and for being good. This way students will know that when you do good things you get good things in return. The parents will know that it is a good school and their kids are getting alot of work done and not just their to have fun, they will also know that their kids are going to behave at school and at home. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; color: #0000ff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Conclusions: **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">These are my reasons why Teachers of Greytown school should pay the students for good grades because they are using the money for a good cause! **

At the moment room 14 have been looking at 4 picture stories, this is mine I hope you like it.


 * 19/3/12 **
 * <span style="background-color: #ff0000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 15px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">WALT: <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">write a descriptive narrative using four photos. You can put the photos in any any order. Remember to be descriptive and to have a message in the story. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">The underground SECRET **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">My dad races out the door to get to work fast his big clown feet spring along the ground, I always wondered where he worked because he never told me. I run down the big steep stairs to show Dad my waterproof camera before he goes to work. When I run outside he’s gone but I seen him press a button so I go and press the button I think he pressed. And the ground opens with a big bubble with a sticker of a colourful bird on the corner. Lucky comes out with me we hop in and press another button and it sucks us threw a big hole, and Lucky and I end up in a hot and sunny oasis. Lucky is my pet cat. [[image:https://lh3.googleusercontent.com/bTM1nVKBawiHDewPqZfkNbv1kTX7RF0p_VOKyDe0aUo97HQIvg8PZcv1E-iXXTe5M7ggdj8H5wewP4-DwN81jEhDfvlJylHePzefXl_HoMdeiwCsmYQ]]**
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">But When we get there, their is all of these footprints huge footprints like someone has been here before, Then BAM a huge bird the size of my cat jumps out of nowhere and lands on my head. I hit the bird off my head, then out comes some other people, one of those people are my Dad, Dad I call out he looks at me and runs over, “What are you doing here”? he yells I try to explain but he doesn’t listen. He gets called by someone in a big black suit with black glasses and a black hat. He runs over and starts to talk to him, the bird sits on my shoulder and sticks it sharp claws into me I tell it to shew. It flies away and lands on a Man’s shoulder. **
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Late after that I have a look around to see if there was a way to get home, then suddenly I find some little mushrooms, there is three of them they all have little numbers on them, I pick one and it has the numbers 3456 on it and then I pick another one and it has on it 7869 and then lastly I pick the last one up and it has the number 0304 I hold them in my hand the juice falls off them like gew, I shove them in my pocket and keep walking. It could be a sign for getting out of here. Lucky and I keep walking then we trip over a large stone and the stone moves and there is a spoon with a key on the other end of it. **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Lucky starts to meow I run over to see what’s wrong, shes trying to dig with her soft and sensitive paws, I **
 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">dig up where she is digging and there is some sort of key lock i get the spoon key out of my pocket and put it in I turn it and then an ipad comes up it says I have to put three pin numbers in I get the mushrooms out of my pockets and put the number 3456 in and a hole opens a little bit then I put the numbers 7869 and it opens a little more, I put the numbers 0304 and the hole opens and Lucky and I jump in it, it leads us to the hole we come into and back into my back yard, we run inside and yell to my Mum she comes running and picks me up and doesn’t let me go “I MISSED YOU SO MUCH WERE HAVE YOU BEEN” I went with Dad to work sorry I should have told you. Thats okay she said. I run up to my room and have look for my pet turtle lenny, he’s swimming around is his tank Lucky sure looks happy to see Lenny she runs up and starts to pat on the top, I get Lenny out and Lucky lays on the floor and and hold his tight in her arms. Now Lucky and I have a secret, it’s called... THE UNDERGROUND SECRET! **


 * <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: 'Trebuchet MS'; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">The End! **